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A Knock in the Rain

Preetika Gupta
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Submitted to Contest #3 in response to the prompt: 'A stranger comes to your door. What happens next?'

The insistent rapping jolted me from the worn armchair, scattering the afternoon sunlight dancing on the pages of my book. It wasn't the polite tap-tap of a neighbor, more a demanding, almost frantic rhythm that set my teeth on edge. Living on the quiet outskirts of Ghaziabad, unexpected visitors were a rarity. My heart, usually a steady drum, began a nervous flutter.

Through the peephole, a man stood hunched, his shoulders slumped as if carrying a great weight. Rain, a sudden and unwelcome downpour, plastered his dark hair to his forehead and darkened the fabric of his simple, mud-splattered kurta. He wasn't anyone I recognized. A knot of unease tightened in my stomach.

Hesitantly, I unlatched the door, keeping the chain firmly in place. "Yes?" My voice, I noted with annoyance, sounded thin and uncertain.

His eyes, when he finally lifted his head, were a startlingly clear grey, contrasting sharply with the grime on his face. They held a desperate quality, a plea that tugged at something within me despite my apprehension. "Madam," he began, his voice rough, as if unused, "forgive this intrusion. My name is Rohan. I... I need help."

"Help with what?" I asked, my hand still gripping the chain. The rain intensified, drumming on the small porch roof.

He wrung his hands, leaving streaks of mud on his already stained garment. "My daughter... she is very sick. We were on our way to Delhi for treatment, but our auto rickshaw broke down miles from here. I have no money left for another. Please, can you help us? Just a little to reach the city?"

My gaze flickered past him, but I saw no auto rickshaw, no sign of another person. "Where is your daughter?" I asked, suspicion coloring my tone.

Rohan's eyes darted nervously down the lane. "She... she is waiting under a tree, just a short distance. She is too weak to walk further."

Despite my reservations, a flicker of sympathy sparked within me. The desperation in his voice felt genuine. "Wait here," I said, and closed the door, sliding the bolt shut.

I hurried to the small window overlooking the lane. Through the blurring rain, I could just make out a figure huddled beneath the sprawling branches of a neem tree about fifty meters away. It was small and still.

My mind raced. It could be a ruse, a way to gain entry. But what if it wasn't? What if a child truly lay ill out in this downpour? My conscience wouldn't let me ignore that possibility.

I grabbed my shawl and a small amount of cash from my purse. Opening the door again, I kept it ajar. "Alright, Rohan," I said, my voice firmer this time. "Show me your daughter."

He seemed to sag with relief. "Thank you, madam. Thank you." He gestured down the lane. "She is just there."

I stepped out onto the porch, the rain immediately soaking through my clothes. Rohan led the way, his pace quick but anxious. As we approached the neem tree, I could see the small figure more clearly. It was a girl, no older than seven or eight, curled up at the base of the trunk. Her face was pale, and her breathing seemed shallow.

"Beti!" Rohan cried, rushing to her side. He gently cradled her in his arms. Her eyes fluttered open, and she looked at him with a weak smile.

My suspicion began to melt away, replaced by a surge of concern. The child looked truly unwell.

"We need to get her inside, quickly," I said, my earlier caution forgotten.

Rohan nodded, his face etched with worry. Together, we carefully helped the little girl into my house. She was light as a feather, her small body trembling. I led them to the living room, where it was warmer.

"Let me get some dry clothes and a blanket," I said, hurrying towards the spare bedroom.

When I returned, Rohan was gently wiping the rain from his daughter's face with the edge of his kurta. Her eyes were closed again.

"What is wrong with her?" I asked softly.

Rohan's voice was thick with emotion. "She has a high fever for days. The local doctor said she needs to see a specialist in Delhi."

I placed the dry clothes and a thick woolen blanket on the sofa. "Let's get her warm first. Then we can figure out how to get to Delhi."

As I helped Rohan wrap his daughter in the blanket, her small hand reached out and clutched his. In that moment, the stranger at my door was no longer a threat, but a father desperate to save his child. And in the quiet of my small home, amidst the drumming rain, a new story began to unfold โ€“ one of unexpected connection and the shared vulnerability of human need.

The little girl, shivering despite the blanket, coughed weakly. Her skin felt hot to the touch. I glanced at Rohan, his face a mask of worry. He looked utterly lost and alone.

"I'll make some tea," I said, heading towards the kitchen. The familiar ritual of boiling water and measuring out the fragrant leaves offered a small sense of normalcy in the midst of the unexpected. While the kettle whistled, I rummaged in the back of the cupboard for the first-aid kit, the one I hadn't opened in years.

When I returned to the living room with the tea and a thermometer, the little girl was still wrapped in the blanket, her breathing shallow and rapid. Rohan sat beside her, stroking her hair.

"Her name is Priya," he said softly, as if offering a piece of himself.

I nodded, offering him a cup of tea. "I'm Meera," I replied. I hesitated for a moment, then gently placed the thermometer in Priya's mouth.

The reading confirmed my fears. "It's a very high fever," I said, my voice grave. "We need to get her to a doctor as soon as possible."

Rohan looked up, his eyes filled with a mixture of gratitude and despair. "I don't know how," he confessed. "I have no money, and the auto rickshaw driver said it would take hours to get it repaired."

I thought for a moment, my mind racing. I didn't have a car, and the nearest bus stop was a long walk, especially in this rain. Then, I remembered my neighbor, Mr. Sharma. He had a car and was always willing to help.

"I know someone who might be able to help," I said, a glimmer of hope in my voice. "Let me make a call."

I went to the corner of the room and dialed Mr. Sharma's number, my fingers crossed. To my relief, he answered on the second ring. I explained the situation, and without hesitation, he agreed to drive us to the city.

"I'll be there in fifteen minutes," he said.

I returned to the living room, feeling a surge of relief. "My neighbor is coming," I told Rohan. "He will take us to Delhi."

Rohan's face lit up with a gratitude so profound it was almost painful to witness. He bowed his head, his voice choked with emotion. "You are an angel, Madam Meera. I will never forget your kindness."

We waited in silence for Mr. Sharma to arrive, the rain continuing to fall outside. Priya stirred in her sleep, her feverish breaths filling the room. In that small space, a bond was forming, forged in the crucible of necessity and compassion. The stranger at my door had brought not just a problem, but also a reminder of the shared humanity that connected us all.

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