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Through the Veil of Thorns

Archita Kumar
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Submitted to Contest #3 in response to the prompt: 'Your character wakes up in a different world. What do they do?'



Rain had been falling the night before, steady and warm, tapping gently against the bedroom window of 23-year-old Elara Quinn. She’d fallen asleep to its rhythm, her fingers curled around a half-read book of poetry, her dreams hazy and half-formed. But what she woke to was not the soft scent of lavender in her bedsheets or the familiar hum of her city street.

The air was cold. Sharp. It smelled of moss and metal.

Elara sat up abruptly, blinking into the half-light of a sun that didn’t feel quite like Earth’s. She was lying in a field of wildflowers—violet and red—beneath a sky tinged orange. Mountains loomed in the distance, jagged and unnatural, and beyond them, a black forest crawled across the land like a shadow.

She scrambled to her feet. “What the hell?”

No signs of civilization. No roads. No buildings. Just the whispering wind and the soft hum of something she couldn’t identify vibrating under the soles of her feet.

She pressed a hand to her chest. Her heartbeat was frantic. “Okay, Elara. Either this is a very vivid dream, or you’re losing your damn mind.”

But it didn’t feel like a dream. The grass was damp against her bare feet. Her clothes—her oversized sleep shirt and shorts—felt inadequate in the chill. And when she pinched her arm, the pain was real.

Panic rose in her throat, but before she could scream, something moved in the tall grass. A rustle. Then a growl.

Elara turned, backing up slowly.

From the underbrush emerged a creature—like a wolf, but taller than a man, its eyes glowing like coals. Its fur shimmered, black shot through with silver. It sniffed the air, and Elara froze, her breath caught.

“Don’t move,” she whispered to herself. “Don’t—”

But the wolf was already lunging.

She turned and ran, dodging trees and thorns, adrenaline surging through her. The forest ahead looked menacing, but she had no choice. The creature was gaining.

Just as she stumbled over a root and fell, a flash of silver cut through the air.

The beast yelped.

Elara gasped and rolled onto her back, expecting teeth.

Instead, she saw a boy. No—a man, not older than thirty. Clad in leather and silver armor, a strange blue fire in his eyes, holding a curved blade dripping with shadowy blood.

He looked down at her. “You’re not from here, are you?”

She blinked. “What gave it away?”

He offered a hand. “Come on. We don’t have long.”


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His name was Kael. He didn’t smile much, and he spoke like a soldier—short, clipped, direct. But Elara followed him, because what else could she do?

“This world is called Amaranth,” he told her as they walked. “It lies between what your people call dreams and death.”

She frowned. “That makes no sense.”

“It wouldn’t. You crossed through a Veil. Most don’t survive the shift.”

“I was just asleep.”

“That’s how it begins for some.” He glanced at her sideways. “Has anything... strange happened to you recently? Nightmares? Lights flickering when you're upset? That sort of thing?”

She hesitated. “Yeah. But I thought I was just stressed.”

Kael didn’t answer.


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They reached a village by twilight, hidden inside the ribcage of a petrified giant. The bones curved overhead like the arches of a cathedral. Fires burned low in stone pits, and the people—if you could call them that—looked like something out of folklore. Horns. Glowing tattoos. Silver hair.

An old woman greeted them. “She is the Hollowborn.”

Elara blinked. “Excuse me?”

Kael nodded grimly. “I suspected as much.”

“She will wake the Thorn.”

“Wait—what?” Elara raised both hands. “Can someone please explain what’s going on?”

The old woman—Shravani, as Kael introduced her—led her to a pool of water and bade her look in.

The reflection staring back at Elara wasn’t quite hers. Her hair, normally chestnut brown, shimmered like ink. Her eyes glowed faintly gold. And around her throat, something pulsed beneath her skin—like a buried flame.

“You carry the Embermark,” Shravani whispered. “A seed of the First Flame, lost centuries ago.”

“Cool,” Elara said faintly. “But what is that?”

Kael’s jaw clenched. “It’s power. Dangerous power. And now that you’re here, the Thorn will stir.”

“The Thorn?”

“The dark god we imprisoned a thousand years ago.”

Elara laughed. “Of course. Why wouldn’t there be a dark god?”


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The following days passed in a blur. Elara was taught how to use her hands to draw light from stones, how to shape shadows into daggers, how to whisper to the wind. She wasn’t a quick learner, but she had something that made up for it—raw instinct.

Kael trained her. He was harsh, but never cruel. He watched her like she was a storm about to break.

And maybe she was.

Because every night, she dreamed of fire.

Of herself walking through a field of burning flowers, eyes full of grief. Of a voice—deep, ancient—whispering, “Burn it all. Only ash is pure.”


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On the seventh night, the stars vanished.

“They’ve found her,” Shravani whispered.

Kael didn’t wait. He took Elara’s hand and ran.

The sky cracked open. From it spilled shadows, winged and screaming. The Thorn’s heralds.

The village fought, fire and magic colliding with darkness.

Elara stood paralyzed, until a child was grabbed by one of the winged things. Without thinking, she screamed—and the scream turned to light.

A bolt of gold shot from her chest. It struck the creature. It exploded into ash.

Silence fell.

Everyone turned to stare.

Kael’s face was pale. “You’re not Hollowborn,” he murmured. “You’re the Flamebound.”

Shravani fell to her knees. “She is the key. She is the door.”


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The final battle came swiftly. The Thorn was waking, deep in the Black Cathedral at the world’s edge. Kael and Elara journeyed for days, crossing rivers of blood and mountains of glass.

“I’m just a girl,” Elara told him one night, huddled under a dead tree.

“You’re more than that,” Kael said softly. “You always were.”

He kissed her then—gently, like she might vanish.

She didn’t kiss back, but she didn’t pull away either.


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Inside the Black Cathedral, the Thorn waited.

He was beautiful, in a way that was wrong—like a painting made of bones and oil. His voice was silk and rot.

“Elara,” he purred. “You don’t belong there. Your world is grey. I can give you fire. Purpose.”

“I already have one,” she said.

“Do you?” His smile was cruel. “Or are you just scared?”

She was. But she’d learned that being brave wasn’t about not feeling fear.

It was about choosing to fight anyway.

She stepped forward. Fire erupted from her palms.

The Thorn screamed.

And the world burned white.


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When she woke again, she was in her own bed. The book of poetry was still in her lap. The rain still fell. The window glowed with city light.

Elara sat up slowly, heart pounding.

Was it a dream?

She got up, went to the mirror.

Her hair was still brown. Her eyes were still hazel.

But around her neck, faint and gold, a mark glowed.

A flame.

A promise.


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