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The Knock at Dusk

Sayman Lal
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Submitted to Contest #3 in response to the prompt: 'A stranger comes to your door. What happens next?'

It was a quiet evening in the village of Nandipur, the kind of silence that feels heavy, almost sacred. The sky was awash in hues of amber and deep purple as the sun sank behind the hills. I had just returned from the fields, my clothes still dusted with the day’s work, and I settled onto the porch with a cup of tea, content to listen to the sounds of crickets and rustling leaves.

Then came a knock.

Soft. Tentative. Like someone asking permission with their silence.

Visitors were rare, especially after sunset. Life in Nandipur followed the rhythm of the sun, and after dusk, doors stayed shut and conversations ended with the day. Curious and a little wary, I set my cup down and approached the door.

There stood a man. His coat was heavy and dark, strangely out of place in the warm evening. He looked as though he had traveled far—dust clung to his shoes, and his face, shadowed by the rim of a hat, wore the exhaustion of a thousand steps. His eyes met mine, uncertain yet hopeful.

“I’m sorry,” he said, his voice low and gravelly. “I don’t mean to intrude. I just need a place to rest. Just for tonight.”

There was something about him. Not threatening—just... tired. Worn, like an old photograph. Maybe it was the way he held his hands, or the soft tremble in his voice. Against my better judgment, but guided by something deeper, I nodded.

“You can stay,” I said.

He stepped in quietly, almost gratefully. I offered him a seat near the fireplace. He sat with a kind of reverence, as if the warmth of the flames was a memory rekindled.

I handed him a cup of tea. He held it carefully, letting the steam rise to his face.

“This house,” he said after a long silence, “it hasn’t changed much.”

I turned to him, surprised. “You’ve been here before?”

He nodded. “A long time ago. I was born in this village. But I haven’t been back since I was a child.”

I searched his face for a trace of familiarity, but nothing surfaced. I had lived in Nandipur all my life. I knew its people like I knew the wrinkles on my mother’s palms. But this man was a stranger.

“My parents died young,” he said softly. “Relatives took me away. Life... went on. But I never stopped thinking about this place. This house.”

There was a quiet ache in his words, like the final note of a song left unsung. I didn’t ask questions. Sometimes, silence is more healing than answers.

I gave him a simple meal—some rice, lentils, and a few leftover vegetables. He ate slowly, savoring each bite like it held a memory. Afterward, I showed him to the spare room, handed him a blanket, and wished him goodnight.

“Thank you,” he said, pausing in the doorway. “For trusting a stranger.”

“Not all strangers are dangers,” I replied. “Some just need to come home.”

That night, I barely slept. Something about his presence lingered in the air, not unsettling, but solemn. As if the house itself remembered him.

Morning came with the chirping of birds and the soft glow of sunlight through the curtains. I rose and walked to the spare room.

He was gone.

The bed was neatly made, the blanket folded with care. In the kitchen, his cup was washed and placed back on the shelf. But he had left something behind.

A note.

I picked it up with trembling hands and unfolded it.

Thank you. You gave me more than a night’s rest. This house... it once held my happiest memories. My father and I planted that neem tree outside when I was eight. I needed to see it again before I left this country, perhaps forever. I wasn’t sure what I’d find, or if anyone would open their door. You didn’t just let me in—you gave me peace. For the first time in years, I felt like I belonged somewhere.
— R

I stepped out onto the porch. The neem tree stood tall, its branches stretching wide, casting a patchy shadow on the earth below. I imagined a small boy, barefoot, digging a hole with his father, their laughter mixing with the breeze.

I don’t know where he went. Or if I’ll ever see him again.

But I do know this: that knock at dusk wasn’t just a traveler looking for shelter. It was a soul returning to the place where it was once whole. A man seeking to close a chapter he never truly got to finish.

And somehow, in that quiet evening, I became a part of his story. A stranger came to my door—but he left as something more.

He left as a memory.


Sometimes the memories are the best and even the worst thing you have to suffer in your life because you get no option other than no choices, the pain the grief the sorrow. Just “Can’t force anyone”.

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