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The Unforseen Knock

Prabhu Dhore
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Submitted to Contest #3 in response to the prompt: 'A stranger comes to your door. What happens next?'

The rhythmic thud of the old brass knocker echoed through the quiet house, a sound so unexpected it made me jump. I'd been lost in the depths of a particularly convoluted crossword puzzle, and for a moment, I just stared at the front door, half-expecting it to be a figment of my concentration-addled mind. But then the knock came again, a little softer this time, as if the person on the other side was hesitant.
My first thought was, who could it be? I wasn't expecting anyone, and the sun was already dipping below the rooftops, painting the sky in hues of orange and purple. Usually, any visitors I had were announced well in advance. My mind raced through possibilities – a delivery mix-up, a neighbor in need, maybe even a lost tourist (though our street wasn't exactly a well-trodden path).
Taking a deep breath, I walked to the door, peering through the peephole. A tall, slender figure stood on my porch. They were cloaked in a dark, slightly oversized jacket, and a wide-brimmed hat obscured most of their face, casting a shadow over their eyes. Their hands were tucked into their pockets, and they shifted their weight slightly, a nervous energy emanating even through the glass. They didn't look threatening, more… uncertain.
I hesitated, my hand hovering over the lock. My grandmother always said, "Never open the door to strangers, dear. You never know what trouble they might bring." But then, my mother always countered with, "Always offer a helping hand, if you can. A kind word never hurt anyone."
My curiosity, as it often did, won out over my caution. I unlatched the door, opening it just a crack. "Can I help you?" I asked, my voice a little more formal than I intended.
The stranger straightened up, and a soft, almost apologetic voice drifted through the gap. "Forgive me for disturbing you," they began, their words slow and deliberate. "My name is Elara. I… I believe I'm lost."
Her voice was gentle, and despite the obscured features, there was an earnestness to her tone. The evening air was growing chill, and I noticed a slight tremor in her hand as it emerged briefly from her pocket, gesturing vaguely. She didn't seem to pose any threat, just a weary traveler. The image of a lost child, cold and confused, flashed through my mind, even though Elara was clearly an adult. My mother’s words about offering a helping hand echoed louder than my grandmother’s warnings.
"Lost?" I repeated, pushing the door open a little wider. "Come in, then. It's getting cold out here. We can figure things out inside."
Elara stepped inside, her movements hesitant but grateful. As she passed the threshold, I caught a faint scent of damp earth and something else, something sweet and unfamiliar, like wildflowers after a rain. She pulled off her hat, revealing a cascade of dark, almost black hair that seemed to absorb the dim hallway light. Her eyes, a startling shade of green, met mine, wide and a little wary, but also relieved. She looked younger than I had first thought, perhaps in her late twenties, with a delicate bone structure and a smudge of what looked like dirt on her cheek.
"Thank you," she murmured, her voice barely a whisper. She hugged herself, a clear sign of the chill she’d been enduring.
"Of course," I said, gesturing towards the living room. "Please, make yourself comfortable. Can I get you something warm to drink? Tea? Coffee? Hot chocolate?"
She seemed to consider it for a moment, then nodded. "Tea would be wonderful, if it's not too much trouble."
"No trouble at all," I assured her. I led her into the living room, where the last of the day's light filtered through the large window. She chose the armchair by the fireplace, though there was no fire lit, and sat down gingerly, her hands resting on her knees. As I walked to the kitchen, I could feel her eyes on me, a curious but not intrusive gaze.
In the kitchen, I put the kettle on, my mind still whirring. Lost? How lost? And in this quiet neighborhood? It wasn’t a place people usually stumbled into by accident. The smell of the wildflowers from her jacket lingered, an intriguing puzzle in itself. I pulled out a box of chamomile tea, thinking it might be soothing for someone who seemed a little shaken.
Returning to the living room with two steaming mugs, I found Elara tracing patterns on the armrest with her finger. She looked up as I entered, a faint, polite smile gracing her lips. I handed her a mug.
"Thank you," she said, taking a careful sip. The warmth seemed to thaw some of the tension in her shoulders.
"So, Elara," I began gently, settling into the sofa opposite her, "how did you come to be lost? Where were you trying to go?"
She took another thoughtful sip of her tea, her gaze drifting towards the window where twilight was rapidly deepening. "It's… a bit of a long story," she began, her voice gaining a little more strength. "I was trying to reach a place I’ve only ever heard about, a place of quiet solitude, away from… everything. A place where the stars are brighter and the air is cleaner." She paused, her green eyes seeming to hold a distant longing. "I must have taken a wrong turn, or many wrong turns. The path became unclear, and then… darkness fell."
There was an almost poetic quality to her words, a touch of the ethereal that made me wonder if she was speaking literally about a physical journey, or something more metaphorical. My practical side wanted concrete details, street names, landmarks, but her wistful tone hinted at something deeper.
"So, you were on foot?" I asked, trying to steer the conversation back to the tangible. "Do you have a phone? Perhaps we could try calling someone, or looking up directions?"
She looked at me, a faint shadow crossing her features. "I… I don't have a phone with me," she said, her voice dropping slightly. "And there's no one to call, not really. This journey was… mine alone."
Her answer created a new layer of mystery. No phone, no one to call, just a solitary journey into the unknown. It was an unusual situation, to say the least. But as I looked at her, sipping her tea, wrapped in her quiet dignity, I felt less apprehension and more a sense of profound curiosity.

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