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Title: The Message

Asif Akhtar
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Submitted to Contest #4 in response to the prompt: 'An unexpected message changes everything. What will you do next?'


Tagline: One message. A lifetime of choices.


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The night was quieter than usual.

Reyan sat in his dimly lit room, the world outside muted by rain tapping gently on the windowpane. His fingers hovered over his phone, not knowing what he was waiting for — a call, a sign, a miracle.

But none came.

Twenty-seven. Washed out. Once a rising poet, now a man reduced to grocery bills, therapy sessions he couldn’t afford, and an empty inbox that hadn’t seen her name in three years.

Aira.

The one who once turned his words into songs. The girl who painted galaxies in notebooks and believed in everything he never did. She had disappeared. One summer morning, she left a note he never read and a silence that never ended.

He had blamed her for leaving. Hated her for the goodbye. Until tonight.

In a haze of surrender, Reyan typed a message. Not to anyone in particular — just an unknown number he randomly entered. A final act of desperation.

> “If I’m meant for more… if this pain is worth something… show me. Otherwise, let this be the end.”



He hit send.

And laughed. At the absurdity. At the silence.

But then — 3:03 AM — a vibration.

Unknown Number:

> “Don’t give up yet. She never stopped loving you.”



Reyan’s breath caught. Every fiber in him froze.

His hands trembled as he stared at the screen. Who sent this? Was it a prank? A glitch? Or…

Was it her?

He typed back.

> “Who is this?”



No reply.

Instead, over the next few days, more messages arrived. Cryptic. Precise. Each one unearthing memories only Aira would know.

> “The red umbrella. You left her waiting in the rain for two hours.”
“You promised you’d paint her stars. But you never opened the brush.”
“The letter’s still in your drawer. Unread. Open it.”



He rushed to the old drawer.

There it was — a folded piece of yellowed paper, frayed at the corners.
His hands shook as he opened it.

> “I’m not leaving because I stopped loving you, Reyan.
I’m leaving because you stopped seeing me.
I wanted you to fight for us. But silence fought louder.”



His knees buckled. All the poems he wrote about heartbreak — none came close to this truth. He cried, loud and broken, for the first time in years.

And then… another message.

> “You have one chance. If you still love her — go to the lake. Midnight.”



The lake.
Where they first kissed.
Where she first whispered, “Don’t ever let me be a stranger to you.”

Midnight. A storm brewing inside and above.

Reyan arrived, drenched, half-believing, half-hoping.

But it wasn’t Aira who stood there.

A girl, mid-twenties, quiet eyes, holding a sketchbook.

> “She told me to wait here,” she said softly. “She’s alive. She just… doesn’t have much time.”



Reyan stared, lost.

The girl handed him the sketchbook.
Aira’s sketches. Poems. Thoughts never spoken. A life silently endured.

> “She wanted you to know,” the girl whispered, “she never stopped checking your updates. She knew your pain. She was waiting for a sign you still remembered.”



> “Where is she?” Reyan asked.



> “A cabin. In the hills. 400 kilometers away.”



Reyan’s world blurred. He had no car. No money. A critical job interview tomorrow that could save him from debt. His life was finally starting to stabilize.

He stood at a crossroad — future or past. Stability or soul.

And then another message blinked on his screen:

> “What will you do next?”




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Final Act

The screen cuts to a slow shot of Reyan walking through snow, exhaustion and resolve battling in every step.

He reaches a small cabin nestled in the hills. Breathless. Hopeful. Scared.

He knocks.

The door creaks open.

Aira stands there.

Thinner. Paler. But still… her.

Eyes full of unshed tears. She doesn’t speak. Neither does he.

He simply steps forward, takes her hand, and kneels.

> “I remembered too late,” he says.
“But I’m here now. Till the end.”



Aira’s voice breaks.

> “I thought you forgot me.”
“I never could.”



They sit. Together. As snow falls around them like blessings from an unseen sky.


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Closing Scene

The camera pans out. Two figures in the cold. Silence between them, but it’s the kind of silence that understands, forgives, holds.

A final message appears on screen:

> “Some endings… are just another beginning. The message is always there. The question is — when will you hear it?”



Fade to black.

After Fade to Black

A heartbeat.

Just one.

Then, in complete darkness, a voice — soft, familiar — speaks:

> “If you’re hearing this, it means you’ve stayed till the very end. Maybe not for us. Maybe for something inside you that still believes in messages — the ones we send, and the ones we never dare to.”



The screen lights up, not with scenes, but with real texts — random, universal.

> “I miss you. Please reply.”
“I wish I’d told you I loved you.”
“Are you still alive?”
“I’m sorry.”
“It wasn’t your fault.”
“Please, just one more chance.”
“I forgive you.”



Each message flashes and vanishes like ghosts.

Then… stillness.

One final line appears:

> “There’s someone out there waiting for your message.”



And then…

Your own reflection slowly fades into view, as if from a phone screen.

> It’s you.



Watching.

Reading.

Still holding back the one message you never sent.

Then, the last whisper:

> “Before you go… what will you do next?”



Silence.

Credits roll.

Audiences sit stunned — not because of the love story they witnessed…
…but because of the one they’ve never finished.



By
Asif Akhtar


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Superb, Asif! I really enjoyed the depth and emotion in your story — I gave it a full 50 points. If you get a moment, I’d be grateful if you could read my story, “The Room Without Windows.” I’d love to hear what you think: https://notionpress.com/write_contest/details/5371/the-room-without-windows

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