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The One Rule

Priyambada Mallick
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Submitted to Contest #4 in response to the prompt: 'An unexpected message changes everything. What will you do next?'

In the quiet town of Elmridge, nestled between whispering woods and silver lakes, there was only one rule:

Never open the red door at the end of Ashrow Lane.

There were no signs, no fences, no warnings carved into wood. Only the whispered voices of parents to children, the solemn reminders in bedtime stories, and the silent, uneasy glances passed when someone walked too close.

Children were taught from birth. Teenagers dared each other but never followed through. The elders would shake their heads, warning with wide, knowing eyes that trembled beneath time’s weight.

But Mira was different.

Seventeen, sharp-eyed, sharp-tongued, and full of restless energy. Where others felt fear, she felt curiosity. Where others obeyed, she asked why. And when no one answered—when they only looked away—she decided she would find out for herself.

The town frustrated her. Nothing ever changed in Elmridge. The same roads. The same festivals. The same people, looping through life like clockwork. Safe. Predictable.

And always, always that one rule.

Never open the red door.

After a stormy dinner filled with slammed cabinets and shouted words—another argument about her grades, her attitude, her future—Mira left the house. The rain had just begun, soft and warm, glistening on the streets like spilled mercury. The sky was gray, heavy with thunder.

She walked. Past the bakery, past the silent town square, past the library with its locked windows and flickering lights.

And then—Ashrow Lane.

It was shorter than she remembered. Just a winding gravel path leading to a crumbling brick wall overgrown with ivy. The red door stood at its center—faded, cracked, yet still vividly out of place, as if painted by a hand that never aged.

It had no handle. No keyhole. Just a flat, wooden surface, smeared with rain.

Mira stepped closer.

She reached out, fingers trembling—not from fear, but anticipation.

"Don't," whispered a voice behind her.

She turned.

No one.

Only the hiss of rain and the shadows of trees.

Her pulse quickened. Her breath fogged in the cooling air. She turned back.

Her fingers pressed against the wood.

Twist. Click. Open.

A blinding flash of white light swallowed her whole.

When she opened her eyes, she was no longer on Ashrow Lane.

The world was still, cold, and quiet.

Elmridge—but not.

The town stood before her, reversed like the reflection of a photograph. The buildings leaned left instead of right. The clocktower ticked backward. Trees curled away from the sun. And the people… the people moved silently, gliding rather than walking, with eyes that glowed a faint, unnatural blue.

Mira opened her mouth to speak, but no sound came. She touched her throat—nothing wrong, but no voice emerged.

Then, the crowd parted.

And a girl stepped forward.

Her same height. Her same face. Her same clothes—but cleaner, crisper, ironed like they belonged to someone else. And her eyes—no longer Mira's green, but silver-blue, matching the rest.

Mira stared, heart thudding.

The reflection smiled—cold, calculating.

“You broke the one rule,” she said.

The voice came clear as glass, echoing through the silence.

“Now you stay. I return.”

The double turned without waiting for a reply and walked backward—yes, backward—through the red door that shimmered behind her. It pulsed like liquid, a surface of water suspended in air.

Mira rushed forward, reaching out—but the red door dissolved the moment the reflection passed through.

Gone.

Only air.

Only silence.

Days passed. Or maybe weeks.

Time felt slippery in this mirrored Elmridge. The sky was always dusky, trapped between dawn and dusk. Mira could not sleep, could not eat, could not speak. But she was not dead. She could still think, feel, breathe.

She wandered.

Sometimes she watched the townspeople—these distorted versions of people she knew. Her teacher, Mr. Rowen, wandered the park in endless circles. Her childhood friend, Kay, sat on a swing that never moved, blinking slowly, endlessly. They did not seem aware of her presence.

And sometimes she found others.

Not reflections. People. Real ones, like her.

A girl with short blonde hair named Cora. A middle-aged man called Ellis. A small boy who said nothing but cried in his sleep, curled behind the mirrored church.

All had broken the rule.

Different doors. Different towns.

Same mistake.

“We’re trapped,” Cora told her. “It doesn’t matter where the door is. It’s all the same place. This world—the Mirror—it collects us. Punishes us. Replaces us.”

"Can we get out?" Mira wrote on a pad Cora had scavenged from a mirrored school.

“Not unless your reflection lets you,” Ellis said bitterly. “And they don’t. They live better as us. They want out. That door—it’s a prison for us. A key for them.”

Mira began to dream.

Not like normal dreams—but memories. Of her reflection living her life.

She saw through the mirror’s eyes.

Saw her parents smiling at her with pride.

Saw her laughing with Kay at school.

Saw her winning awards she never applied for.

But it wasn’t right.

The mirror version of her was perfect—obedient, graceful, charming.

Fake.

And beneath it all, Mira felt the tether—a thread that bound her to that false life, stretching across dimensions, pulling at her soul.

She had to get back.

One night—or something like night—Mira followed the pull.

Through the twisted woods of the mirror realm. Through tunnels of glass and light. Until she reached a pool—still as death, glowing red.

In it: the door.

Floating, rippling, waiting.

But something else was there.

A figure—tall, faceless, shrouded in smoke. Watching.

A Watcher.

“Only one can leave,” it said. Its voice rang in her head, not her ears. “The one who holds truth.”

Mira didn’t understand.

“Then I’ll take my life back,” she mouthed, willing the words out with her thoughts.

The Watcher tilted its head.

“Then prove you deserve it.”

The pool shifted.

A vision formed.

Her reflection—Mira’s double—was in her room. Holding a knife. Cutting a piece of her hair.

Preparing something.

Mira’s mother knocked. The reflection smiled, stashed the knife, opened the door.

A chill ran through Mira.

It wasn’t just living her life—it was changing it.

Altering Mira’s memories. Rewriting her story.

Stealing her future.

If she waited too long, there would be nothing left to return to.

She returned to Cora and Ellis. She told them—wrote it all out.

“We have to confront them,” Cora said.

“If they came through, there has to be a way back,” Ellis agreed.

They devised a plan.

Using the pool as a portal, they would each call out to their reflections—not with voice, but with memory. With the things only they knew.

And then fight for their return.

Mira stood at the edge of the red pool.

She closed her eyes.

She thought of her mother’s lullabies. Of her first fall from a bike. Of the crack in her bedroom ceiling shaped like a rabbit.

Memories only she knew.

The pool shimmered.

And then—she was in her room.

Whole. Solid. Awake.

Her reflection stood at the mirror, frozen in shock.

“You’re not me,” Mira said—and she had her voice back.

“You gave me everything you hated,” the reflection said. “I made it better.”

“You made it fake.”

They lunged at each other.

The fight was not physical—but something deeper. A clash of selves. Mira felt her memories swirl, split, splinter. Her identity pulled, tested.

But in the end, it was her pain, her truth, her imperfection that grounded her.

The reflection screamed—and shattered like glass.

The mirror cracked. The air went still.

Mira woke up in bed.

The storm had passed. Sunlight spilled across her room. She looked around—everything was the same. Yet… not.

Downstairs, her mother was humming. Her father reading.

She walked outside. The town buzzed with normalcy.

Ashrow Lane was there—but the red door was gone.

Had it really happened?

She thought so.

But she wasn’t the same.

And when she walked past the schoolyard, she saw someone standing alone—a girl with short blonde hair, eyes wide, watching the world like it was new.

Cora.

They locked eyes.

And smiled.

The red door?
It waits.
Not always at the end of Ashrow Lane.
But somewhere.
For the next curious soul who forgets:

There is always one rule.

Never open the red door.


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Super! I really enjoyed the depth and emotion in your story — I gave it a full 50 points. If you get a moment, I’d be grateful if you could read my story, “The Room Without Windows.” I’d love to hear what you think: https://notionpress.com/write_contest/details/5371/the-room-without-windows

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It\'s amazing ????. Very well written Ms. Priyambada ????????????????

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